This is even better than Everything, and that's saying something, especially considering that this one was so short. But - I really liked how you intercalated when they arrived at the concert and when they were already kissing each other and stuff. <333 The effect it causes on the reader is so good... x3 Plus, I really like the idea of them snogging in the middle of a crowd, completely lost in the moment, as if they were ordinary people and at the same time running the risk of being spotted... :3
Hearts pounding and blood rushing in their ears as breathing made static air; they were enclosed in their own world. The screaming of everyone else was paid no mind and the shockwaves of music only fueled the coursing of love in their veins.
AJKLAJKLAJKLAJKLAJKLAJKL; that was such a brilliant heartfelt piece. ♥♥
They were alone in a mass of beings. They could’ve been at home, onstage, in the car, on a rooftop, on the other side of the continent, anywhere, and it wouldn’t have mattered. Love doesn’t change like that. They were alone, the rest of the world colorless as they smiled at each other.
THAT. THAT WAS JUST GUH LOVE. sobs. this piece is just so so amazing. the imagery, your diction. mems*
this is littlehigh by the way. thanks for the add! :)
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This is even better than Everything, and that's saying something, especially considering that this one was so short. But - I really liked how you intercalated when they arrived at the concert and when they were already kissing each other and stuff. <333 The effect it causes on the reader is so good... x3 Plus, I really like the idea of them snogging in the middle of a crowd, completely lost in the moment, as if they were ordinary people and at the same time running the risk of being spotted... :3
Hearts pounding and blood rushing in their ears as breathing made static air; they were enclosed in their own world. The screaming of everyone else was paid no mind and the shockwaves of music only fueled the coursing of love in their veins.
Wonderful paragraph! <333
Oh, and I'm adding you to my f-list. :3
Thanks for making my afternoon better! <3
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They were alone in a mass of beings. They could’ve been at home, onstage, in the car, on a rooftop, on the other side of the continent, anywhere, and it wouldn’t have mattered. Love doesn’t change like that.
They were alone, the rest of the world colorless as they smiled at each other.
THAT. THAT WAS JUST GUH LOVE. sobs. this piece is just so so amazing. the imagery, your diction. mems*
this is littlehigh by the way. thanks for the add! :)
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