"Christmas in Albuquerque" Part 2

[fakepoptart]

Dated: Finally finished today after 3 days of almost non-stop typing.

Title: Christmas in Albuquerque (because I couldn't think of anything less lame)

Summary: The human tragedy known as Jesse Pinkman finds himself alone on Christmas... He doesn't take it well, but he discovers that maybe there's a little more in store for him this evening than he

Comments

[anonymous]

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I love this. XD at "you'll never know, cause he's Walt!"
It's wonderful to read someone else's perspective on the Walt/Jesse pairing besides my own. Goodness, in reading your slash I realize just how much I have to learn in that area. And your characterization of Jesse gets better with every story. Kudos for writing and finishing such a long story! It may have taken awhile, but the time definitely wasn't wasted.

[fakepoptart]

Oh man, please tell me you didn't finish it already. It should take at least 48 hours to read!! >:p

& THANK YOU even though that's kind of a strange observation since it was your slash that finally made me do something like this. haha~ 'Love that you're digging my Jesse characterization, since that's something I work particularly hard on.

[readishmael]

THANK YOU THANK YOU THIS IS MY NEW FAVORITE FIC EVER I LOVE YOU!!!!

Seriously, though, this is amazing. Not that most of your BB hasn't been solid and sometimes great, but this is miles above everything else you've done, even that fantastic drabble you posted at ff.net. You have such insight into Jesse, and you don't flinch away from any of the ugliness or tragedy of him, to the point where it was almost overwhelming and I had to read the story in pieces. I love the desperation and the ambiguity in his attachment to Walt, and the confusion does so much to make the sex scene believable without making it too dark or icky. Just awesome all the way through.

Because this is so close to perfect, I'll point out the one typo I saw: when Jesse is talking about Andrea, you want "preyed," not "prayed".

[fakepoptart]

A typo?! FUCK.
*runs to fix*
lol

The bleakness of Jesse was making it hard to write so that's interesting that it also made it sort of difficult to read for you! And I'm incredibly thrilled that you thought the sex was believable. ^_^ That was the part I was most worried about. This is as brutal as fic-writing's ever been for me so I'm sooo happy that you rank it higher than the rest of my stuff. Seriously, it made my night. xD

[readishmael]

I've read this through a couple more times since last night, and I have to say that while, given the emotional trajectory of the piece, I think it reaches a fitting and satisfying conclusion, I really can't help but wish for some "morning after" fic, especially if it's from Walt's POV. I think it's totally fair that you leave Walt's intentions and feelings vague, and you do so in a way that doesn't feel like a cheat (that is, a way to keep from having to give him believable motivations), but I'm so, so intrigued by the hints that he's doing it out of a much simpler desire, and a desire for Jesse specifically, than Jesse's complex and confused motives. There are still multiple ways to read even that part of it, of course, and nothing's simple with Walt, but the fact is that I was kind of genuinely moved by him saying Jesse's name during, as well as finding it really hot. You really managed to subvert my own expectations for how the Walt/Jesse pairing could work, especially for their first time. I'd always kind of thought that there

[fakepoptart]

I know how you feel; despite the mental agony this caused me I'd like to do a follow up to it, but morning-after fics are so. damn. hard. I think it's because "morning afters" in life are hard.
I'm psyched that you noticed how Walt's motives seeming more like sincere desire than anything else. I'd *really* like to do something more with that but I'd have to get skull bashed by the inspiration-hammer.
Believable scenarios for them were definitely the hugest hurdle so it's extremely fulfilling to hear that mine made the cut AND subverted expectations. :) Thanks sooo much for the extended review, really makes my writing of this feel worthwhile, and maybe it will encourage me to do more! Eventually. Maybe. Someday.

[communicator]

I really like this, and thank you for posting it. Wow.

[fakepoptart]

Thank you ! =D

ICON SAYS IT ALL

[sinloi]

IS THIS REAL?

NO, SERIOUSLY. I THINK I STOPPED BREATHING AT SOME POINT, PASSED OUT, AND IMAGINED THIS.

AND I KNOW THERE WERE REALLY REALLY AWESOME PARTS BESIDES THE SMUT, BUT FUCKING HELL, THE SMUT. I AM AN INCOHERENT PILE OF MUSH.

WILL BE BACK LATER TO LEAVE A PROPER REVIEW

Re: ICON SAYS IT ALL

[fakepoptart]

I actually lol'd at your comment; it simultaneously filled me with bubbly delight. :D
Don't jinx yourself now, I've lost several pieces of writing that turned out just to be dreams. xD
And yes, the icon was important. ;)

[vegarin]

Oh my god. This is... I have no words. I haven't thought of checking out your page again, but I'm glad I did. This was too painful to read, but only because it was so fantastic.

Thank you, thank you for devoting yourself to this tiny fandom! You're wonderful!

[fakepoptart]

Ahh well at least I'm not the only one who was pained by it. Though for different reasons. :p

And yeah no problem. xD Thanks so much for reviewing!!