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Beyond the Horizon (2/2)

Jun 18, 2008 00:25

Beyond the Horizon

Summary: Between his memories of Desmond on the freighter and his visits from Charlie in the future Sayid resolves to break free from Ben and return to the island to rescue his friends. A sequel story to 'The Musician' in two parts. Also an entry for charlielives challenge #4: Future Charlie.
Characters: Sayid, Charlie, Ben and ( Read more... )

dark fic, angst, supernatural

Comments 22

mrslinus17 April 1 2008, 19:43:39 UTC

You ought to take a bow. This fic was so very good! I loved everything about it. Couldn't pic my favourite moments- I'd have to post the entire fic! Bravo =P

falafel_fiction April 2 2008, 08:02:13 UTC

Thank you!! I think I'd feel a little silly taking a bow alone in my work room, but thanks for the lovely comment!

zelda_zee April 2 2008, 02:42:30 UTC

Excellent fic! Though really, you made me cry and I should be mad at you for that, and for killing Sayid off, but I'm not, because this was so good, even if it was sad.

This was a fascinating story and totally engaging. I loved the Charlie & Sayid interaction.

I'm so glad you're still writing!

falafel_fiction April 2 2008, 08:10:04 UTC

Thanks! Yeah, I should hate me too for killing dear Sayid, but it's getting to the stage where his life is so full of pain and sin you just want the poor guy to have some peace in his soul.

Thanks! S4 is bringing me down as a Charlie fan but as a Sayid fan it's great to see him finally getting a meaty storyline. I have to admit the new lostsquee challenges are giving me ideas too!

meagan4dominic April 3 2008, 06:35:19 UTC

That was great. It was such a great ending because it tied everything up. I like how you killed a lot of characters & also kept a few on the island. I also loved the tiny touch of ConMama that you added & I'm so glad that you gave Aaron back to Claire

falafel_fiction April 3 2008, 07:21:48 UTC

Thanks megs! I know a lot of readers like conmama. It's not my thing, but I wanted to make Charlie into Claire's secret silent hero who brings Aaron back and she doesn't even know it. Glad you liked the ending!

millari June 23 2008, 06:46:17 UTC

Whoa, this definitely became epic! I wasn't expecting that at all when I read the first part ( ... )

falafel_fiction June 23 2008, 08:40:36 UTC

Thanks again for R&Ring!

I'm afraid I can't really imagine an ending for Sayid that isn't tragic anymore. He's so burdened by pain and sin that I don't think he'll ever be at peace with himself. I think Nadia is the only one who could bring Sayid peace and now they can only be together in "the next life".

I don't feel like Ben ever truly felt remorse for stealing Danielle's child and it's a terrible thing to do to a mother. It felt fitting that Ben should recieve his comeuppance from her.

There are a lot of suggestions that there is a sense of karma on the island, but when it comes to Charlie I just don't get it. Like you say he gave up everything to save his friends, but his sacrifice only caused further chaos. I need to believe that Charlie's heroic act will be given true meaning and value some day.

millari June 23 2008, 14:36:48 UTC

Wow, I was really tired last night when I wrote that comment! Sorry for the incoherency. :P

Again, it feels great to have him been more ao
Um, what I meant to say was it feels great to have Charlie be for the most part, so confident about everything, well except where Claire and Aaron were concerned. That bit was heartbreaking.

As for Charlie's acts only creating more chaos, I've got to wonder if whether so much of what doesn't sit right about Charlie's arc in those episodes was due to the writers being in a rush to fit everything in for the finale; maybe they just couldn't manage to make it work, and get the plot developments they wanted for the next season. IDK.

The idea of Sayid and Nadia together in the next life is a rather comforting one, btw. I really would like Sayid to find some sense of redemption. For a long time, he seems to have been running on fumes.

falafel_fiction June 23 2008, 16:23:49 UTC

I've got to wonder if whether so much of what doesn't sit right about Charlie's arc in those episodes was due to the writers being in a rush to fit everything in for the finale; maybe they just couldn't manage to make it work, and get the plot developments they wanted for the next season. IDK.

I have very little respect for the Lost writers these days. I can't make excuses for their poor handling of character arcs and the lack of continuity. They are just ignoring their plotholes. It's very sloppy careless writing. Time constraints aren't an excuse either. There was plenty of redundant filler in S4.

One thing I'm really appreciating about BSG is its care over the continuity and character development of both the major and minor players. You don't get that on Lost anymore. The show is a mess.

Excuse my ranting! I was asking on your fic journal if you have any recs for me from your own archive? Have you?