So, uh, I already left a review over at FF.net, but I love this chapter so much, I'll leave another one! As mentioned, "That was fucking fantastic," indeed.
To summarize, Part three is so freaking hot, (whoa) Brittany can also play high school politics, and interactions between Santana and Quinn are just amazing. Rachel... I'm disappointed in, but it's true that they've never actually vocalized Rachel and Quinn's relationship. Make it all better and happy and sexy, please?
I think your characterization is way off. I appreciate you wanting to focus on having an open relationship, but your focus has got in the way of the characters. Some of the dialogue that they speak doesn't work. There is too much time spent justifying why the characters would do this, that it all feels (and probably is) just you justifying their actions. Which, again, out of character.
Anyway, thanks for writing. I won't be reading any more.
Aww thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it, wouldn't want to make people spend time reading over 31 000 words of crap lol
Brittany is defintely the ace up my sleeve and I intend to explore her character more in the next chapter. I hear canon is going to make her insane? So she's not stupid... just crazy. They dont like the blonde girl very much lol
And yessss Santana hehehe I loved fleshing her out more in this chapter. I hope canon actually bothers to give the two cheerios more background than they're currently getting. The switch between loyalties for Glee and Cheerios is confusing.
lol Gritty Realism or Porn with Plot. Why not a lovely combo of both? Glee gives me so much to play with... The only thing I really dont like about Glee is how they downplay bullying. People get seriously screwed up when they're bullied even if it's just a slushie to the face.
High school was repulsive. I still have vivid recollection of it because I'm only just finishing my degree (so only four years ago, I was one of the poor fools struggling through that system lol). And I have seen some terrible shit. One popular girl did something to piss off another popular girl who ordered everyone to ignore the other girl's existence. For a few months that girl wasnt in school, why? She tried to kill herself with pills after their cruelty. Seriously? Wtf is wrong with people
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lol Oh well, Glee will always be there waiting for you ;)
Ah anonymous... the structure of the post seems familiar to me so I find it suspect lol I dont take it personally. As it is, I think my characters are well in character even though I've added more aspects to their personality than already exists in canon (canon... kinda doesnt know how to write teenagers as a whole lol But I forgive them since its supposed to be funny and upbeat).
Thanks for the review :) Once I finish exams Im going to have to inhale your latest story :D
i was so excited when i saw that the story got updated! i kept checking your site every once in a while for one and now, i'm so excited! i love the story! i love devious!brittany and that comment she made about being one of the top 3 girl in school. i'm looking forward to when they all get together, so keep up the good work. :D
Awww thanks. Sorry I made you wait so long lol Unfortunately it'll be at least a week before I touch the next chapter (so you're a little prepared for how long its going to take lol) because next week is exam week! Lots of studying on my end. However, once that's over with I'll get right back on to writing :)
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To summarize, Part three is so freaking hot, (whoa) Brittany can also play high school politics, and interactions between Santana and Quinn are just amazing. Rachel... I'm disappointed in, but it's true that they've never actually vocalized Rachel and Quinn's relationship. Make it all better and happy and sexy, please?
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I think your characterization is way off. I appreciate you wanting to focus on having an open relationship, but your focus has got in the way of the characters. Some of the dialogue that they speak doesn't work. There is too much time spent justifying why the characters would do this, that it all feels (and probably is) just you justifying their actions. Which, again, out of character.
Anyway, thanks for writing. I won't be reading any more.
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Brittany is defintely the ace up my sleeve and I intend to explore her character more in the next chapter. I hear canon is going to make her insane? So she's not stupid... just crazy. They dont like the blonde girl very much lol
And yessss Santana hehehe I loved fleshing her out more in this chapter. I hope canon actually bothers to give the two cheerios more background than they're currently getting. The switch between loyalties for Glee and Cheerios is confusing.
lol Gritty Realism or Porn with Plot. Why not a lovely combo of both? Glee gives me so much to play with... The only thing I really dont like about Glee is how they downplay bullying. People get seriously screwed up when they're bullied even if it's just a slushie to the face.
Thanks for the review :)
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But this is hot. Really. And I don't give a rat's ass about OC. Who the fuck knows what's oc about a tv show character?
Oh, right anonymous knows...
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Ah anonymous... the structure of the post seems familiar to me so I find it suspect lol I dont take it personally. As it is, I think my characters are well in character even though I've added more aspects to their personality than already exists in canon (canon... kinda doesnt know how to write teenagers as a whole lol But I forgive them since its supposed to be funny and upbeat).
Thanks for the review :) Once I finish exams Im going to have to inhale your latest story :D
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Thanks for the review!
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