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The Sequel: Part VIII

Apr 11, 2007 23:08

Title: 'The Sequel'
Fandom: Desperate Housewives
Pairings: Bree Van deKamp and Lynette Scavo
Chapter: Part VIII
Rating: PG-13ish
Author's Note: Very. very. emo. Angsty. Sad. Boo hoo.

( Enjoy. )

Comments 9

I can't believe I'm leaving tomorrow anonymous April 12 2007, 07:03:29 UTC

I can be wrong, but I wonder if you aren't speaking about you, there... just a little bit???
As a matter of fact, I love it and I understand many things thanks for you!
Difficult to say what's my favourite part, because it's really a... a whole (makes any sense?).
Anyway, I'm leaving tomorrow, and I won't have internet for two weeks!!! It's awful! So, I will have to wait for the next part (or parts). I feel so sad.
Good bye, my favourite writer... Read you soon...
P.S. Don't worry about my mails.

Re: I can't believe I'm leaving tomorrow fanfictess April 12 2007, 17:49:27 UTC

My personal situation is quite different from Bree/Lynette's but yes... I've experienced some guilt for enjoying my sadistic fantasies. Luckily for me, my gf enjoys them too. ;) However, I did want this chapter to try and help people understand the psychology behind it and some of the issues that go on in that sort of dynamic. So, I'm glad you have!

I can't believe you're leaving!! Good luck with everything, we'll talk soon I hope. xox

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fanfictess April 12 2007, 18:07:09 UTC

Thank you. I told myself that this story would have more meat to it... that is wasn't just going to be about the sex. It's certainly more of a challenge when you have to write an actual story *lol* and not just steamy hot scenes from your own perverted imagination! ;)

'it was beautifully written'

Thank you, that made my day. I know I can write hot sex but it's truly complimentary to know some people find my writing 'beautiful'. :D

marciacross4eve April 13 2007, 01:20:58 UTC

This was a great chapter....I actually cried....it explains their feelings so wonderfully!! Your writing is amazing.....the imagery in this line is perfect.....It meant Bree would have to peal back the layers of flesh she’d painstakingly zipped herself into in hopes that no one would be able to see through their translucency to her broken heart.....it explains her perfectly!!! LUV this chapter also!! And yet another cliff-hanger!!!

much luv, mc4ever

fanfictess April 13 2007, 01:53:06 UTC

I'm always hanging people from cliffs, you should buy a harness. ;) Thank you, I can't believe you cried... YAY! *lol* I like the imagery in that sentence too and that's why I left it as is but I do have to say an editor would probably find it very awkward and would tell me to pair it down. Damn editors! I wish I had one. *lol*

mckt April 13 2007, 03:52:08 UTC

This was so beautifully written! This is my favorite part so far! I love how you have captured the emotion of both women. I especially love the last paragraph describing Lynette's feelings. I had no idea how many layers there were to this story until now. It is wonderful!

fanfictess April 13 2007, 17:52:49 UTC

Thank you!! :D You guys like your angsty emo chapters. *grin* There are many layers to these types of relationships but most people who haven't experienced them before just take it at face value (I don't blame them either). I am trying to educate you all! ;)

felicity_fan April 16 2007, 19:18:23 UTC

Whoa!
Hon, that was wonderful.

As the minutes ticked by, Lynette prayed that the desperation she was beginning to feel inside wasn’t showing on her face. Her heart felt like it was melting against her ribcage and oozing into every free cavity in her body, as if it were getting ready to evaporate itself out through her skin and splatter all over Bree in a frantic attempt to prove her love.

I think I might actually write this somewhere to remember it or to read it whenever I want. Really. Beautiful.

Personally I needed this emo part a lot to appreciate the story as a whole. I love being educated in an non-violent way, like you do in here. So, thanks.

fanfictess April 17 2007, 00:56:33 UTC

Wow...thank you!

Again, I think that paragraph would have editors all over it in a tizzy. But yes, I liked the imagery there. The idea of something so grotesque as bloody heart bits covering Bree meaning something as non-macabre as love was... some good writing, I do say. ;)

You're very welcome. I knew you guys would need some explanation as to why the hell anyone could/would act like this. I always intended to have something in this story to help you all understand the psychology, thought and feeling behind it. I'm glad you appreciate it for what it is.