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Accidental Deadstop: A Yullen Fanfiction

Sep 04, 2009 16:33

Story Title: Accidental Deadstop
Fandom: D. Gray-man
Pairing: KandaxAllen/Yullen
Genre: Humor, Romance, Action
Setting: AU
Rating: T
Warnings: Lots of cursing
Summary:

It was a simple game between master and apprentice. Allen would run, and if Cross caught up to him, he would have hell to pay, literally. It was just his luck to run into a ( Read more... )

d. gray-man, kandaxallen, fanfiction, yullen

Comments 6

freakingcage7 October 2 2009, 15:46:36 UTC

(First half ( ... )

freakingcage7 October 3 2009, 17:27:36 UTC

"Their where": It might be a typo, but just remember ( ... )

freakingcage7 October 3 2009, 17:28:31 UTC

"It didn’t take long before they just about a building away from the said alley. By then the rain had already gotten worse.": Set the scene a bit more. Is the rain colder, thicker, coming down harder? Is his hair matted to his face, does it make it harder to see--does he have an eye-patch?--is it going down his underwear? Is the girl wearing a coat, maybe Lavi's concerned ( ... )

thank you! fanlyst October 6 2009, 01:31:39 UTC

Haha, that was really a lot and like, woah...I really need to review my work.

First off, I'd like to thank you for this! It shows just how much I need to work on, so thank you so much! I'm definitely printing out your comments to use as a guide line since I plan to fix those errors and find what I can in the other chapters.

Man...I'm at a loss for any more words of gratitude to throw at you. Its really inspiring, and I'm going to start with them as soon as I have the time.

Sorry I can only send a single message back for all the ones you sent, but really, thank you so much! I do hope chapters 2 and three of my story wasnt too off...again thank you for this, and for reading my fic as well!

Have a nice day!

pkijsteix February 17 2013, 04:57:02 UTC

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I miss the story! ext_2072152 July 19 2013, 00:38:50 UTC

hey. i have read the story and would like to see it continued. I know its been a long time and everything, but it would be a shame to see such a beautiful story go to waste! if this story is on hiatus, please let me know. Also, if you are willing to put it up adoption or something (a lot of people are doing that now) i would love to continue it. please contact me back at shawnawht@gmail.com or on fanfiction under shawnawht. Thanks!