a masturbation story

[fashonablygrfik]

[author's note: harsher words this time. "fucking" words, instead of the flowerly language i've used in the past. or rather, a meld of the two, and i don't know how well it worked. i'm thinking one should use one or the other, but not a combination. what do you all think?]

a masturbation story My fingers still smell like my smell, even

Comments

[squarebox]

Wow, that's delicious. I like how direct you are here, a nice contrast with your other two stories where you take turns stating and implying. And it's just really really... inspirational.

[fashonablygrfik]

thank you so much. glad you liked it. i guess this means the different style goes over well. :)

[lustybard]

i haven't read enough here yet to compare, but i'll certainly say that i enjoyed the style of this one ... i write both ways as well, so i do know what you mean about 'fucking' words. ;)

oh, and you added me, so i added you back. :) seen you around before, of course, and glad to be on your friends list!

[fashonablygrfik]

heh, i was just going to comment that i'd added you. but you got to it first. thanks very much for the feedback :)

[steeltrue]

Very nice indeed. I don't think the words used were too harsh, really. Thanks for posting.

[thrust_into_you]

The harsher words were very hot, though I enjoyed perusing your entire journal and appreciating the different writing styles. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us. :)

[fashonablygrfik]

thanks for the critisicms. i do find that i'm rather lacking in good synonyms sometimes, and end up with phrases like "thickness" which i admit, even make me giggle. i dunno, i guess somehow i find that when writing these sorts of things, that although i want to be descriptive, the best stories are the ones when there is plenty left up to the imagination. but how to point the reader in the right direction without the silly words? the repetitive nature of some writers to reuse words like "throbbing member" or the simpler ones "dick/cock/penis" get boring, i suppose.

again, i really appreciate your comments. every little bit helps as i try to write stories that don't make people giggle. *laughs* of course, now i will never be able to use "his thickness" ever again because even tho' it was nearly at that place, it now shares a top spot in my 'words that make me giggle' bank with "throbbing member". i will now never be able to think of it as anything but a title. *laughs*