The Pass - attempt at verse

[fatalit]

I know this is crap because I applied Russian rules of poetry-writing to English, which has others.

The Pass

The earth took blood and wine in
The sacrifice still smoulders
The mountains are silent
Protecting their shoulder

The pass that seems so narrow
In both ways leads to Hades'
As heavens scarred with arrows
Weep for the tearless ladies.

Comments

[trueriver]

This is powerful and moving. With love and *hugs*

[fatalit]

Thanks a lot dear!

And I'm awfully sorry I've posted this sad verse on Christmas eve - didn't realize that until a friend had pointed it out.
Anyways, Merry Christmas to you! May many good and joyous things happen to you in the coming year!

[jeannie_gordon]

Привет! Надеюсь, ты узнаешь меня по картинке (ник другой). Ничего, если я и здесь тебя зафренжу? :)))

[fatalit]

Узнала ага :) Френди, конечно, я рада буду. Только видишь сама, как редко я тут пишу.

[jeannie_gordon]

Главное - не количество, а качество! :)))