Hello! I’m one of your editors this week. I’ll begin with the technical aspect and move onto a general overview following. Corrections are in brackets (empty brackets denote a comma deletion):
-He was a bully; he used sarcasm to put down students in his class, did not instil[l] in them a love of literature and clearly disliked teaching. Despite that, he is one of only three English teachers I had over all my years of formal education[ ] who taught me anything I have held onto.
-I remember sitting on the floor after the end of the normal school day, age 9, numbers less than one hundred should be written out (here and later in the story)
- I expect he is no longer alive[,] but his legacy lives.
-Periodically[,] I return to those books I loved as a child: First a note on the technical: I would be careful of your overuseage of semicolons. As Kurt Vonnegut famously said: “Here is a lesson in creative writing. First rule: Do not use semicolons … All they do is show you've been to college.” Now, I don’t necessarily take that hard line
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Re: Your BF edit!fawatsonJune 26 2014, 07:29:37 UTC
Thanks for your comments. I take your point about my punctuation. A lot of my fan-fic is written in Mary Renault's universes which means I have trained myself to use her style of punctation which is quite old fashioned now. I need to change it depending on what I am writing. As always you have been very helpful.
rolls in the editmobilebardiphoukaJune 28 2014, 20:18:02 UTC
Allo then, this is your other editor. Of course the gra editor Kep has taken the major work as she does so often. Leaving me to do some idle ruminating as though I was actually on to something important, as though the writer doesn't know or wouldn't in a bit.
Such as with this piece. This was an excellent bit of writing which led me to think of some of the things I have written over time. I admit I have written very little in the way of fanfiction. But I do know a bit about nonfiction.
The truth is that writing court reports is as important as writing fanfiction. Or anything actually.
Imagination is an important thing in literature. And in life. And I am told everyone has an imagination. But in writing the need is often for clarity and just getting things done. How many people have semiwritten novels (hides the drawer from view). But writing the everyday needed work helps in that. And being succinct. Which you have shown in this piece. Ever so well written and I hope to read more.
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-He was a bully; he used sarcasm to put down students in his class, did not instil[l] in them a love of literature and clearly disliked teaching. Despite that, he is one of only three English teachers I had over all my years of formal education[ ] who taught me anything I have held onto.
-I remember sitting on the floor after the end of the normal school day, age 9, numbers less than one hundred should be written out (here and later in the story)
- I expect he is no longer alive[,] but his legacy lives.
-Periodically[,] I return to those books I loved as a child: First a note on the technical: I would be careful of your overuseage of semicolons. As Kurt Vonnegut famously said: “Here is a lesson in creative writing. First rule: Do not use semicolons … All they do is show you've been to college.” Now, I don’t necessarily take that hard line ( ... )
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*Scurries off to change typos, etc.*
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Such as with this piece. This was an excellent bit of writing which led me to think of some of the things I have written over time. I admit I have written very little in the way of fanfiction. But I do know a bit about nonfiction.
The truth is that writing court reports is as important as writing fanfiction. Or anything actually.
Imagination is an important thing in literature. And in life. And I am told everyone has an imagination. But in writing the need is often for clarity and just getting things done. How many people have semiwritten novels (hides the drawer from view). But writing the everyday needed work helps in that. And being succinct. Which you have shown in this piece. Ever so well written and I hope to read more.
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