massively cheesy story. Read at your own risk

[featherhawk]

I joined a writing group last month. For our first assignment,  we had 10 days to write a story of 1000+ words. This was my attempt:

SHADOW OF DOUBT

Rage glittered darkly beneath the surface of her words, clipping their edges with a sharp brightness Michael heard, but found difficult to interpret.

“Razielle,” Even in frustration, her name came out

Comments

[ninermike]

He reminds me of people who use "possibly" and "perhaps" as often as they can to sound intelligent.

[ahloren]

I like it

[featherhawk]

Thankyou ^_^

how are you, Hailey?

Laura is getting married august 4th. You are officially invited.

I don't know if you will be able to come, but the wedding is up here at our church @ 4pm.

[ahloren]

Wow Laura is getting married in August. Yea... I can't make it but thank you for the invitation.

I am doing well enough. I have health problems again but when don't I have health problems? Your still in the UP? I thought you were returning to FL.

Let me know what's going on,

Hailey

[secret_wolver]

Nice job. So, how did you do?

[featherhawk]

How did I do the story? Or how did I do as in the past tense of How do you do?
^_^

[secret_wolver]

I meant did your group enjoy the story? ^_^;

[featherhawk]

well, it was a small group, mainly for the purpose of encouraging us to keep writing throughout the summer. I recieved a graet deal of constructive criticism, but everyone seemed to like it ^_^

[c_eagle]

Wheeeeee.. you're back!! *winghugglepounces* ^v^

[featherhawk]

sort of. I'm at school for the summer (as well as the next two years). I get internet access an average of once every other week.