Perfect hair, perfect teeth, and a talent for dead languages. Really, it wasn't fair at all.
Hee. Great.
On a more serious note, loved the bit with Hermione and the... it was a war memorial, wasn't it? It should be at Hogwarts; the Ministry doesn't deserve it, and the wrong names would go on it.
Thank you! And yes, it's a war memorial -- the rotunda has the names of alumni, their year and college, their rank and the date and place of their death (I think -- it's been a while), all carved in marble on the walls.
Oh yeah, what play did they go to see?
Some awful student production of a bad student-written play (the playwright is Dawn's roommate). I may have been flashing back to the pretentious student drama of my own college days, mixed with a truly awful professional production of MacBeth I once saw -- set in Vietnam, I believe. It was probably over-ambitious and had bad historical analogies in it.
You're very kind. I've never seen the point of working out elaborate crossover scenarios, to be honest--they just weigh down the story with awkward infodump moments, because one is generally so proud of figuring out how the universes connect that one can't help sharing it with the reader. In my experience, the reader doesn't necessarily need to know all that.
I'm not sure about a sequel. I'm not entirely sure how many of Hermione's friends are still alive, actually, since this is pretty clearly a post-war scenario.
I liked that the slash wasn't overt, and it didn't revolve around them falling for each other in that 'you've become my whole world, I can't see beyond you way' that slash is prone to. I like that they can talk to each other, and I Enjoy their conversations. The "maybe one day the characters will speak to each other" had me lmao.
I thought the ending fit in so well, and definite-please sequel this. Or write more of this pairing.
I agree that the cross-over explanation is unnecessary- I don't really care how they got there; just write the pairing and interests (like the bonding over dead languages)credibly and the rest will fall in.
And I love the little details that Hermione notices that let her now Dawn is a bit more than normal. I would LOVE to read that reveal, in this setting you've created.
The "maybe one day the characters will speak to each other" had me lmao.
Heh! I'm glad you liked that -- although there's a bit of self mockery in it, as my characters tend to speak around each other, a lot of the time.
I find Dawn appealingly geeky, so pairing her with Hermione made a strange kind of sense to me, and they do have a lot in common aside from that, in their experiences of war, of evil, of a world beyond the mundane. I'm a little worried about a sequel, since it seems to me that Ron would almost certainly be dead in this future, and perhaps Harry as well, and who knows who else?
Here via hermionesviolin's rec -- *squee!* I really like your Hermione -- there's just so much imperfection in her that shines through, and I love the way she's jealous of Dawn... yay. Nicely done. :)
Thank you! I'm extremely fond of Hermione, myself, but I don't see the need to idealize her -- she's more than capable of being perfectly awful. I think in this case, though, the jealousy helps drive her attraction to Dawn.
I don't really know Hermione except via the movies, but your Dawn is wonderful! I love that she isn't afraid to walk late at night, and that she doesn't ask too many questions. I don't read much girlslash, but this is exactly the kind I like: thoughtful, insightful, sweet :)
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Hee. Great.
On a more serious note, loved the bit with Hermione and the... it was a war memorial, wasn't it? It should be at Hogwarts; the Ministry doesn't deserve it, and the wrong names would go on it.
Oh yeah, what play did they go to see?
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Oh yeah, what play did they go to see?
Some awful student production of a bad student-written play (the playwright is Dawn's roommate). I may have been flashing back to the pretentious student drama of my own college days, mixed with a truly awful professional production of MacBeth I once saw -- set in Vietnam, I believe. It was probably over-ambitious and had bad historical analogies in it.
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I'm not sure about a sequel. I'm not entirely sure how many of Hermione's friends are still alive, actually, since this is pretty clearly a post-war scenario.
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I thought the ending fit in so well, and definite-please sequel this. Or write more of this pairing.
I agree that the cross-over explanation is unnecessary- I don't really care how they got there; just write the pairing and interests (like the bonding over dead languages)credibly and the rest will fall in.
And I love the little details that Hermione notices that let her now Dawn is a bit more than normal. I would LOVE to read that reveal, in this setting you've created.
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Heh! I'm glad you liked that -- although there's a bit of self mockery in it, as my characters tend to speak around each other, a lot of the time.
I find Dawn appealingly geeky, so pairing her with Hermione made a strange kind of sense to me, and they do have a lot in common aside from that, in their experiences of war, of evil, of a world beyond the mundane. I'm a little worried about a sequel, since it seems to me that Ron would almost certainly be dead in this future, and perhaps Harry as well, and who knows who else?
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