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[kezzla]

I'm new, so here goes nothing! Please comment!

Title: A little bit longer
Fandom: Final Fantasy 12
Theme: hm, not really sure XD
Characters/Pairings: Vaan/Penelo
Rating: PG

My only problem with this fic was I couldn't seem to write in first person with Vaan so please please please bare with me.
I ran close behind Larsa, not knowing exactly where he was

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[kunstarniki]

I understand that rapid typing can lead to casual errors. BTW: we are to 'bear' with you, not 'bare' unless you are suggesting communal nudity. There are several spelling and verb tense errors here. It would be a good idea to spell-check and proof more carefully.

You have captured moods in these vignettes quite well. It would be helpful if you provided more factual context to assist your reader to understand the settings. However, you show much promise and should continue to let us see your work. ;)

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[kezzla]

Thanks for the tips. I was some-what brain-dead when I wrote this, and just wanted to get it out of my system before going to bed. Thanks again.

[heyheyrenay]

For "theme", that's asking if you're writing for our current challenge of FFX / strawberry. It would be helpful if you put [off-challenge] in your subject line. :D