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Alone

Jan 02, 2012 01:25

Title: Alone
Fandom: FFXIII
Pairing: Fang/Lightning
Prompt: Pain
Rating: PG
Words: 100
Spoilers: None
Author's Note: I'm baaaack!!! Dreamlinks to resume as soon as I have access to a computer. Until then, I can do 100 Words drabbles on my PS3. As for this drabble, I'm leaving ALOT to the imagination.

( Finding herself on the verge of collapse, she turned and- )

fandom: ffxiii - ogc, pairing: fang/lightning, author: machina_dues

Comments 2

ryu19 January 2 2012, 04:17:28 UTC

Unique structure here with the heatbeat between dialogue and description. Looking forward to more of your work!

machina_dues January 2 2012, 05:44:14 UTC

I got the structure idea from Dark Tower volume 2, The Drawing of the Three, the chapter called "Shuffle." In it, a character's conciousness lapses mid-sentence. I basically made the lapses much more frequent for this drabble.