Comments | ff_yuri_drabble: together always

ff_raiya in ff_yuri_drabble

together always

Mar 08, 2012 23:57

Title: We will always be together
Fandom: FFX-2
Pairing: Paine/Rikku
Prompt: hurt/comfort
Rating: PG
Words: 285, sorry about the awkward number.
Spoilers: Near the end of the story before the final battles.
Author's Note: My first yuri and first drabble, hope you like it.

( i'm not going anywhere )

pairing: paine/rikku, fandom: ffx-2, prompt: genre - hurt/comfort

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ryu19 March 8 2012, 00:13:46 UTC

Wonderful drabble for your first one!

A few grammatical mistakes but other than that, very sweet!

ryu19 ff_raiya March 8 2012, 00:19:20 UTC

yay thanks lots means alot :p
just to help me could you tell me mistakes?

Re: ryu19 ryu19 March 8 2012, 00:21:01 UTC

Well the most glaring one I noticed was the periods at the end of speaking. It should be like this "I love you," Paine said. It should only be the other way if there is nothing after it. For example: "I like you."

Re: ryu19 ff_raiya March 8 2012, 00:30:47 UTC

Thanks for advice! it's been a long time since ive had to write anything.

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