Prompt Post 2.0

Jun 23, 2012 14:58

With the season finale behind us I figure we'll have an explosion of prompts soon. So, new prompt post. Please post any new prompts in this post. But you can always find fic or fill more prompts in the original prompt post.

Rules!1) One prompt per post, please! If you have multiple prompts, no worries, just make separate posts for each. Please ( Read more... )

lin beifong is my hero, sparkle bush, prompt post

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Equilibrium (1/?) anonymous August 13 2012, 14:14:29 UTC
It's in progress, and I still can't make promises about how far it will get. Decided to try posting bit-by-bit.

Water is drawn from his lungs in a stream. He feels it before he sees it. When he inhales again the air grates, sticks down his throat. His back arches. He can't breathe properly, struggles to escape his own ribs, knows something must have snapped already but can't identify what.

His shoulders are being clamped together, restricted. He gasps, tries to cough as everything burns as his face burns. He tilts, off-balance in his own skull. The grip does not lessen even though he can't feel his right side at all, it's numb and the breath drives into him harder, irregular, uneven like a saw. Something else bubbles out through his lips--hot and wet and thick. He can't see. There are dark shapes flaring in front of his eyes. Spirits, his face is burning his eyes are burning the vice around him remains let me breathe I can't, I can't ( ... )

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OP anonymous August 13 2012, 14:22:54 UTC
Oh. My. Glob. Thanks SO MUCH! It's an awesome start!

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Author Anon anonymous August 13 2012, 20:16:36 UTC
You're welcome--thank YOU so much! :D Really happy you're liking it! Hopefully the next few sections will come out soon.

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Re: Equilibrium (1/?) anonymous August 14 2012, 15:58:07 UTC
Whoa. *_* holy shit, that gave me chills. Definitely excited to read more! (poor Tarrlok though oh my god.)

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Re: Equilibrium (1/?) anonymous August 15 2012, 02:52:49 UTC
I like this story and hope you continue it.

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Re: Equilibrium (1/?) anonymous August 16 2012, 01:02:00 UTC
ASDFGHJKLASFVWIETBOWPB MOAR. 8D

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Author Anon Note! anonymous August 16 2012, 04:01:00 UTC
Hey guys--thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Seriously, I nitpick my stuff nigh constantly so it was a huge relief to know it turned out alright haha. I have a lot going on for the next week or so. There's a possibility I'll be able to get more done and posted within that, and I would like to finish the story up, so there's a pretty good shot I will finish. Started the next section too. Just wanted to let you know that me not posting tomorrow doesn't equal a dead story. I'm not entirely sure how things will end, but I have a lot of fun improvising through these sorts of prompts so hopefully it'll finish with something fun. And by fun I mean either Tarrlok's life will suck much more or maybe he'll get a break. I'm not sure yet. It could really go either way.

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OP; Re: Author Anon Note! anonymous August 16 2012, 04:34:28 UTC
We're just really glad that you take the time to write this. *is jumping up and down giddily and hyper* thanks for the notice.

But yeah... to be realistic I don't see how things could get better for Tarrlok but a not-a-total downer ending isn't impossible either... so we'll see! :)

Have a good day/night!

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Re: Author Anon Note! anonymous August 16 2012, 21:45:15 UTC
Duuude... I'd just like to say you're awesome.

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Re: Author Anon Note! anonymous August 18 2012, 03:18:11 UTC
I agree with the above post. :)

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Re: Equilibrium (2/?) anonymous August 23 2012, 04:22:11 UTC
He doesn’t want his face bare, even after the damage has healed enough to make bandages unnecessary. They’ve been redressing them for weeks, and on the day they start to lead him out without finishing he stops in his tracks. One of the orderlies tries to tell him this is part of his recovery. Tarrlok ignores them and, almost mechanically, finishes the job himself. There is no intervention. He doesn’t comment ( ... )

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Re: Equilibrium (2/?) anonymous August 23 2012, 14:13:36 UTC
Anon, come here and let me hug you and Tarrlok tight. Seriously, my nerves have not shut up until this new update was done! >.<

Just... oh my god. No words. Just feels.

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OP, Re: Equilibrium (2/?) anonymous August 23 2012, 18:15:32 UTC
Person before me took the words right out of my mouth, really.

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Re: Equilibrium (2/?) anonymous August 24 2012, 02:49:28 UTC
Oh. Wow.
I...don't know what words I can use but this is amazing and tragic and I can definitely see this happening. The despair, and the stark descriptions of emotion and the part with the mask...wow.

"Tarrlok can’t think about the man Noatak became. He can’t think about whether choosing differently might have made a difference. He can’t."

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Re: Equilibrium (3/?) anonymous August 25 2012, 00:22:29 UTC

There is rarely an answer. He finds that ironic.

He begins seeing things out of the corner of his eye. The hooded figure, porcelain closer to bone picked clean. It is unfocused, fleeting as a shadow. When Tarrlok looks directly he finds nothing there.

At first he apologizes, tries to explain himself only to have the words die on the tip of his tongue. It doesn’t make any difference, because like everything else the damage is done and Noatak is dead and innocent people went to prison because of him and he’s bloodbent the Avatar, the council, the chief of police. Three children. In the end he couldn’t protect anybody. History will remember him as a corrupt, dangerous official and history will be right ( ... )

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Author Anon anonymous August 25 2012, 00:24:49 UTC
I just want to take a second to say THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE FEEDBACK! :D I'm so not used to it, and it really means a ton to me. Thrilled you guys are enjoying--hopefully there will be more sections out soon!

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