The Sleepover (Title will probably be changed later): Chapter 1

[fictionforeplay]

There was a tiger sleeping in his bed. A lithe, deadly creature curled up beneath the soft down comforter of his bed. As long as the tiger was sleeping he was safe, everyone was safe. He was humiliated that he thought of the man laying in his bed as such a fierce, terrifying creature, but there was really no other way

Comments

[flwrpwr_vampyre]

This is so.. yum. I love the two separate POVs. Mohinder putting so much emphasis on every detail and Sylar just glossing over everything.
The second chapter will be up soon right? y/y?

[fictionforeplay]

I actually didn't decide until later to add Sylar's part, but I love thinking in his perspective so much that I just had to.

And as for Sylar just glossing over the details - He just wants to get to the sex scene. :P

[flwrpwr_vampyre]

I'm glad you added his part, it really was a nice contrast to Mohinder.

LOL A man after my own heart.

[fictionforeplay]

...or brain.

>.< /cheesy

[sylargrrrl]

“Remember how late we would stay up? You would tell me your father’s theories, and I would act excited and dim-witted, like I’d never read the book before. Like I’d never met your father Chandra. Like I didn’t kill-"

That is a line of pure uncut WIN. This was so compelling, I love how you wrote both Sylar and Mohinder, it was appropriate. I can't wait to see where it goes next. Whenever Sylar just walks into Mohinder's life and feels that he can just take control of it, it makes me full of glee. The way that he enjoys a mindfuck so, fits his personality. Also you get a cookie for mentioning his empty and formally really creepy in that HE HAD PLASTIC ON THE FURNITURE LIKE AN OLD LADY! apartment. Chap 2 soon plz. ;P

[fictionforeplay]

I just always imagined Mohinder telling Zane/Sylar about his father's book and Sylar sitting there trying not to look bored going, "Yeah? Oh really? Wow. Neat. Uh-huh" ::plots how to kill next person Mohinder leads him to::

I always wondered where the hell Sylar slept and I figured he still had the apartment, just moved the stuff to his watch shop or something. I feel like he wouldn't really want the things that reminded him of his old life, like the creepy grandma furniture, rofl.

[xdewix]

Oooh, I loved this very much! The choice of using two POVs was great. Thank you for posting, this was a lovely thing to read in the morning. ^^

Can't wait to see what happens next!

[fictionforeplay]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, I've been fighting with myself over whether to post it for the last few days. I've rewritten so many thigns and gone over it so many times to check for typos (which I'm sure there probably are still a few I missed :D).

[fictionforeplay]

Btw, I'll get the next part up as soon as it's completely finished. I promise some yummy smut action. ;]

[teecub]

Wow. That was soooo not what I expected! Heh. Mohinder was kicked out of his bed by a murderer... who wanted to sleep in it? o.O PRICELESS! Thank you for sharing!

[fictionforeplay]

::giggle:: Sylar is so mean to poor Mohindy.