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Apr 02, 2009 23:50

Title: Berlin
Status: Applicant
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 706

( BERLIN )

Comments 8

No. fallen_scholar April 6 2009, 22:52:00 UTC

If as poetry, it's good. As prose it flops.

Re: No. paleshadowgirl April 7 2009, 01:28:13 UTC

To be honest I learned a lot more from your reply to the pickpocket story about what you disliked in this - namely a lack of story and the fact that it is too "serious" or "dense". The piece is what it is - there's no dishonour in being rejected for things I consciously aimed for.

Re: No. paleshadowgirl April 7 2009, 04:16:24 UTC

I've been thinking about what you said and this is one of those 5 a.m. revelations ( ... )

Re: No. pensandpad April 7 2009, 04:36:38 UTC

That's it? That was only one vote. Give it a month. See what the other voter thinks.

Thread 6

uncertain trachea April 22 2009, 00:23:57 UTC

Hello. I keep meaning to post a response to this. You are a strong writer, obviously, but too much is packed into this piece for it to be flash fiction but the piece is too short to be a short story and subsequently I'm not sure how to proceed. So for now, I'm abstaining. If you've written a longer story, I'd be very curious to see that.

Re: uncertain paleshadowgirl April 22 2009, 01:04:09 UTC

Well, I recently posted a story in Write Away called "Camden". It's not as finely-combed as the above, but it's much less intense.

http://community.livejournal.com/write_away/1400370.html