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Fic: The Very Long Night of Kaidan Alenko

Feb 02, 2011 01:07

Title: The Very Long Night of Kaidan Alenko
Fandom: Mass Effect
Characters/Pairings: Kaidan, Garrus. Implied established Fem!Shepard/Garrus, past Fem!Shepard/Kaidan.
Rating: PG
Warnings: A bit of mild language, barely worth mentioning.
Word Count: 2,691
Summary: Kaidan and Garrus have a sane and rational discussion about the woman they both love. ( Read more... )

fics, mass effect, fanfiction

Comments 37

seeds_of_chaos February 2 2011, 18:05:36 UTC

I really enjoyed this. Alenko's not my favorite of the crew, but I do like him, and it made me sad to see him portrayed so angrily in fics (nevermind what Bioware did). You did a great job of portraying Kaiden's actual side - "Come on, Garrus, you know me better than that."

Great job with the dialogue; I could feel the awkward rolling off the screen. Oh, these two boys.

I just...really enjoyed this. Your portrayals of Kaiden and Garrus were great. You managed to catch how tired Kaiden is without turning him into a ragemonkey (I love the bit about "Welcome to the Citadel, please spend all your money"). Give yourself a pat on the back :]

fifmeister February 3 2011, 20:36:45 UTC

Thank you very much! I'm in pretty much the same boat as you: Kaidan's not my favorite, but I have enough of a soft spot for him that I'm a little taken aback by some of the vitriol he gets. I'm glad you enjoyed the fic, especially the characterization! :)

elinatrevisan February 2 2011, 18:23:38 UTC

This was very good. Well-written, and it's also nice to see Kaidan acting like an actual adult about everything. The characters were in character, and you conveyed the emotions well. I definitely like it!

fifmeister February 3 2011, 20:37:30 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

katznhund February 2 2011, 18:45:40 UTC

With all of the time and crazy things that happen I think all parties could be adults about the changes in feelings.

I love the way you had these two work things out.

fifmeister February 3 2011, 20:39:25 UTC

Exactly. These aren't love-struck teenagers, after all. ;) I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for the comment!

clafount February 2 2011, 18:51:22 UTC

Really great. Characterization was spot on and I really felt how awkward it was for both men.

fifmeister February 3 2011, 20:42:06 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad the awkwardness came through.

zidane February 2 2011, 18:56:28 UTC

I must say that you have an excellent grasp of Kaidan's voice. I rather enjoyed this!

fifmeister February 3 2011, 20:44:01 UTC

Thanks! I'm happy to hear that, especially since I don't have a whole lot of experience writing Kaidan. Glad you enjoyed it!