Envy Not The Moon

[fildred13]

Envy Not The Moon (Silence

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[tickle_me_z]

Let me pretend I was once loved by thee

Were we supposed to fill it in?

Great poem but I might rethink "I say that all is fine but I,/
I actually just want to die."

But then again, what do I know?

[fildred13]

rethink the grammatical sound? or rethink the emotion? two very different actions.

[tickle_me_z]

The grammatical sound. The emotion's fine, you mostly likely want to go with that sort of feeling for that line but the sound's a little off.

Otherwise, the poem's really good.