Real good bub :) great description and dialogue. The idea of the scenario feels real too, brought the idea across well. and very nice big sis always gets em routine, i know the pain hehe! Great lil story, works well, love the delay of Chase's name too, adds a nice lil touch of , ermm, added interest? suspense? dunno but it works well. And six seventy five for a jack n coke and a black vodka? good priced bar man..heehee! Endin's good too,if a lil corny :p hehe!
Yah bar be gooood :-) big sis always gets em? tehe! You want to romp a Russian? Thanks for the comment, I really, really appreciate it. Tehe the ending has to be corny dude, it's America! tehehehehe!
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And six seventy five for a jack n coke and a black vodka? good priced bar man..heehee!
Endin's good too,if a lil corny :p hehe!
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