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[flaminlyle]

I can't tell if this is funny or not. Opinions welcomed.

A Voice in the Night

INT. OFFICE -- AFTERNOON
A middle-aged BOSS sits as his desk talking to
his SECRETARY over the intercom.

BOSS
(into intercom)
Excuse me, nurse.

SECRETARY (O.S.)
Sir, I'm not a nurse. I'm your secretary.

Comments

definitely funny

[pendulous]

Yeah, its funny, alright,
but maybe instead of an intercom, you should use like, a lady.
Yeah, like a lady with one of those funny armadillo purses.

And instead of the boss, you could have maybe, a bus stop or something.

And then maybe at the end, you could find out the man in the hotel was really a super hero or the president or something.

Other than that, perfect!
Don't change a thing.