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Fic: Grace - Chapter 15 (part 2)

Apr 25, 2007 12:17

Title: Grace - Chapter 15 (part 2)
Rating: M
Fandom: P!atd (Brendon/Ryan)

( Loretta, she takes a deep breath, in through the nose and out through her gently parted lips. I can hear her necklace dangle against the tabletop, can feel her breath against my neck, her fingers against my back. “I just want you to know that if you need it, then I’m here.” )

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Comments 102

kthxrawr April 25 2007, 02:47:08 UTC

I am completely lost for words, apart from oh, Brendon.

[that was a way of saying this was awesome and depressing but still so good, if that makes sense?]

flash_indie April 25 2007, 04:01:20 UTC

It makes sense, and yay! Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it. ^^

fabledfaith April 25 2007, 02:48:44 UTC

I'm just... speechless.
I'll leave a better comment tomorrow, I promise.

flash_indie April 25 2007, 04:01:45 UTC

Ahah, this is still a lovely comment. Thank you so much. ^^

fabledfaith April 25 2007, 10:58:50 UTC

I.. still can't get over how amazingly you write. Jesus. Your description, the suspense, the style, characterization. And when Brendon finally spills the 'I love you's', god. I could like, feel my heart swell or something.

And then the last line, damn.
I re-read it probably six times? I was just like,
nowaynowaynoway.

But this chapter is just.. nothing short of brilliant. But I'm not surprised. (:

And I can't deny the fact that I want Ryan back, lol. So I hope he'll turn up soon? c:

<3 Beautifulbeautiful job.

flash_indie April 26 2007, 06:25:36 UTC

mmm, thankyouthankyouthankyou. I really didn't want to kill Catherine off, it was just, there was nothing else I could do. She was tired and broken and she needed it. She was beyond repair.

Again, thankyou.

(Ryan's back next chapter. ^^ So no worries about that.)

meinzinger_patd April 25 2007, 02:55:56 UTC

i think my heart just stopped *checks heart* nope! still beating! :) but that was amazing. you have a gift my dear friend, the emotion in those words is incredible and i honestly cried! i love your stories! they're so amazing!!! i really wish i had i higher vocabulary right now :( you will be famous one day, and then all of us on lj can proudly say we read your slash! :D

meinzinger_patd April 25 2007, 03:10:22 UTC

trying to write a better comment now :P ( ... )

flash_indie April 25 2007, 05:56:50 UTC

Ahah, thank you so much! I love it when people quote it back to me, coz then I get a better idea of what works and what doesn't. I always want to improve with my writing, so it's great to know what people are liking. ^^

And yes, just, thankyousomuch.

crazy_jew789 April 25 2007, 03:08:45 UTC

I think my heart stopped
wow

flash_indie April 25 2007, 04:09:13 UTC

Sorry. *revives*

(But thank you too)

crab_apple_kid April 25 2007, 03:22:06 UTC

holy shit. that ending caught me so off guard. your writing always amazes me<3

flash_indie April 25 2007, 04:09:53 UTC

Thank you so, so much. *hugs*