Crushed

[blacklightglitz]

Title:In Pieces

Comments

[ragnamuffin]

I think you did just fine. :) The first line is really nice, it sets the scene right away, and seeing the word lanky in use makes me smile. Perhaps the imagery could have been clearer at the end, but isn't it nice to leave room for interpretation too?

[blacklightglitz]

thank you for your comment it truley helped! im off to write another!

[mr_pooch]

You did really well! I think your imagry was close, though I admit to being a little confused though. Do write another-I'll be glad to read it!