....show me lonely, and show me openings....

[flightofstars]

Sanctuary

I speak
Without any prompting
No question to answer
No argument to win
No lie to defend against
No heart to win over
Without any fear
Of malice
Or ridicule
Or shame
Or judgement
Just your ear inclined to my mouth
And the safety that proclaims

(Do your worst Ian et co...)

Comments

[2shades_pink]

im lovin that one..:)

[flightofstars]

Thank you. I added you back. :)

[soulharvest]

online ka pala. hello.

[flightofstars]

Wala ako sa YM baka kausapin kit ae tas. tas. tas di na ako makakatulog ng maaga. :D

[soulharvest]

-_-" okei

[pallas_athene24]

And the safety that proclaims? wahu mean? i like the simplicity of your tone here, and you pretty well have a clear situation presented, as well as an "I" persona, but i think the thought of your poem is a bit held back and restricted. ::or then again, i guess i shouldn't be commenting on a personal poem like this cuz it's not for public viewing::

[flightofstars]

I really had trouble with that last line. I'm going to revise it as soon as I think up of somethign that is just as simple but makes a lot more sense :P

[chromaticity]

Nice.

[flightofstars]

:)