Fic: "A Million Little Pieces"

[flutie2891]

kalliel's birthday present! Hope you enjoy =D

Title: A Mother's Job
Rating: K
Summary: Mikoto just wants to help her son. Itachi, Mikoto, pre-massacre.
Warnings: None
Word Count: 820-ish
Author's Note: Written, like, a year and a half ago (ie. right before the big Uchiha brothers fight and Madara's Big Reveal).

Comments

[kalliel]

Oh, I did enjoy. Very very much! :D

Itachi+Mikoto moments make me wibble so much. ;__; And yours here is tinged with just this immense, unmistakable--and yet flawlessly masked--tragedy. Not unlike what Itachi and Mikoto experience here themselves, at the personal level.

I especially like the interplay of these two bits:

She bit her lip, deciding on whether or not she should gamble and mention... "If you ever- I don't tell your father everything, you know."

and

who had grown so used to not needing help that he had forgotten how to ask for it.

Because the first takes them both into this intensely personal space, a confidance; and the last tells the reader that even in that space, nothing will be revealed, beause the words to do so cannot be found. When Fugaku comes in and seals this truth, the emotional resonance of this is that much more devastating.

My heart, it is captured. <3 Awesomeawesomeawesome job.

AND CONGRATULATIONS ON MAKING VALEDICTORIAN! MUCH PRAISE FOR YOU! :DDDDDDD

[flutie2891]

Glad you liked it! =D And thank you. *takes a bow*

[jamminbison]

The whole time I was thinking, 'If only his father didn't come in the room, perhaps he wouldn't have massacred the clan, hurhur'

Lovely! The dialogue felt very natural and the whole thing flowed very well. Nice!

AND CONGRATS ON VALEDICTORIAN FROM A TOTAL STRANGER.