be an editor and a critic.

[flyingfish21]

i would like your help, if you are willing to comply.
i am applying to a university for a creative writing program this summer.
and i need to send in two samples of my writing.

i wrote this piece on march 11 in my journal after surgery.
i may have already read this to a few of you if you visited me.
i like constructive critism and gramatical

Comments

[fattyonwheels]

COLUMBIA?!!!

[flyingfish21]

no, sorry.
i wish i could go there.
i love the city and i'd be with my favorite person in the entire world and we could have sex on the train everyday!
but the schedule interfeares with family vacations.
i'm actually applying to alfred university, which is in western new york, south of buffalo.

[gypsygaragesale]

Heather, that is really powerfully written. That is what I call creative writing

[____vague]

i second that, ilaria.

[flyingfish21]

ilaria, thank you so much.
i can't spell to begin with, so i don't have if that was a typing error.
and thank you for your compliments.

i have a theme for my sample writings:
both have to do with my injury.
the other is a process analysis essay that i wrote for one of mr. olivia's creative writing assignments on how to survive surgery.
what can i say-- it was an emotional time and inspired creativity.

[anonymous]

eh

[mistykristy]

it's definitely powerful, no doubt about that. and it's wonderfully written. i especially love your usage of "Superman" to represent your father.
However, something is missing, and I'm not quite sure what that something is. But I know it can be tweaked just a little bit for that ultimate oomph.

[flyingfish21]

thanks.
if you think of anything to give it more oumpth, let me know.
but other than that, i don't know what you are looking for.

[badlemonice]

Wow. I liked it i think your talented and i love the illusions u put in my head while reading this. This kind of competes the puzzle of the stories u told me were the pieces and this was the missing piece under the couch. I love you heather knowlton.
-Ava

[flyingfish21]

i <3 you, ava.