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inugrlrayn in fma_cya

After the Fall

Jun 17, 2012 17:59

Title: After the Fall
Artist/Author: inugrlrayn
Rating: PG
Warnings: none
Prompt: Roy tries to apologise for killing her parents. hurt/comfort
Word Count (if necessary): 1757
Summary (if necessary): post series, ignoring CoS. Al and Winry pop up at Roy's office looking for leads on Ed's disappearance.
Disclaimer: I don't own the series, characters, etc.
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Comments 5

catw00man June 18 2012, 15:25:38 UTC

Oh wow this is so touching! I love the way you dealt with these two and the entire situation. The emotion from both of them is so real, and I love the part where she'd like to forgive him but can't. Somehow, the way you painted this, it just makes sense for them to be grieving the situation in each other's arms.

It wasn't my prompt, but for me I think you made the right call on the level of "shippiness." For me it was very genuine and appropriate. Thanks so much for sharing this! :-)

Also, I think you might want to check the formatting. I think you missed a < /i > as the last section is all in italics. ;-)

baroqueangel June 18 2012, 19:53:51 UTC

Oh, so much angst, I love it <3

alice_pike June 19 2012, 03:42:10 UTC

Ohh, Jesus fucking Christ. Roy and Winry's history is a huge reason why I prefer the first anime, and like, THIS IS WHY. There is so much crap between them, and by all accounts they should never want to even speak to each other, but then they get thrown into proximity by pure fucking chance and they respect each other despite all of it, and fffff this is one of my favorite relationships ever.

Roy's line here, that "Ed is gone," hit me really hard; and I'm not sure why, exactly? Because like, duh, of course Ed is gone, that's not news, but hearing Roy say it like that, having it be the summary of all of his Elric-related guilt was just really jarring--but good! So good. And that Winry can at least offer him some absolution for that is beautiful.

I agree that the level of shipiness is well-balanced, that this can be suggestive and yet takes the time to deal with the emotional tangle that needs to be dealt with.

hikaru_9 June 21 2012, 04:48:11 UTC

Oh Rayn, you did this beautifully. So full of angst and emotion and it was just lovely <3 Thank you, You filled my prompt beautifully.

Also, lol I got you to write me FMA fic! And I didn't even ask for Hughes/Ed XDDD

zippitgood June 25 2012, 01:15:56 UTC

Oh, this is goregous and really paints the scene for how broken and shattered they both are by Roy's actions. The fact Winry can't forgive him and it isn't a matter of won't is very fitting. The feeling of melancholy and loss carries through so well.

This has the right level of shippiness for the moment. Anything more and it wouldn't be true to the moment and the characters. Wonderful.