So darling, DARLING, stand by me!

[nabaroo]

Title: The Lunar Alchemist
Author: Kayland Elric
Full Name: Elle Elizabeth Elric
Full Species:  Maryis Sueis Edwardus Twinius
Hair Color: Brown, so I guess they aren't identical
Eye Color: Golden?
Unusual Markings/Colorations: N/A
Special Possessions: Loneliness
Which Gate it Came From: Gate of Edward Twins, Gate of Bitchy Fame-Seeking Sues, Gate of

Comments

[le_squeaky]

'“Say hello Alexander.” Nina cooed and Alexander barked at me before leaping on me and ripping my head off like I deserved!'

Wow... and I thought the prologue was bad... THIS IS WORSE OH GODS!! D: This just deserves a spork CANNON!

[saphira112]

Here I totally thought I couldn't get worse...

(Grammar Nazis, do your worst.) <-- DAMN RIGHT I WILL.

I think I may repost this after you with MY OWN comments. And you missed “You’re older sister., by the way *snort* I don't understand what's so fucking difficult about "your" and "you're". Honestly.

ONE GIGANTIC SPORK for the lack of respect for the English language, one for making Al so OOC that my eyes burn, one for making Ed have sudden connections and almost as OOC as Al, one for the shitty plotline, one for the lack of description, scene-setting, and reason AND A SPORK CANON TO FIRE ALL THESE AND EXTRA ONES IN CASE ME HAVE EXTRA AMMO for the fact that there NO FUCKING REASON why Ed and Al would have a sister and why she would join the military.

Oh, P.S., Al DID take the written test, but he dropped out before the physical. Kinda complicated in this story line. Anime sucked compared to the manga (story-wise). Speaking of, NEW FMA. WANT :D

[saphira112]

Oops.

*cannon, not canon *fail*

[nabaroo]

I miss a lot of things, it seems. :/
But also, I had so many comments with "learn spelling and grammar" that I wasn't gonna add any more. She just fails.

Read the reviews, guys. Then you'll know fanfiction.net has truly gone to shit. They're telling her it's great, and she should continue. One person actually said it was epic.

[saphira112]

Meh. You got the bigger, more glaring issues.
Indeed she does.

IT IS NOT FUCKING EPIC. THIS HAS TO BE SOME OF THE WORSE SHIT I'VE EVER READ IN MY LIFE. IT'S WORSE THAN THAT ANIMAL FARM BOOK OR WHATEVER. BLARGH. EW.

Actually, "Animal Farm" was quite educational... if you think about government... BUT THAT'S NOT MY POINT.

Can I spork the next chapter? Can you give me a link ta do it? :D

[kookiety]

blonde haired amber color eyes boy

and to think I thought golden orbs were getting repetitive... I have much to learn.

[rinfang]

Sues are an exception, too.