no offense to you, but to me it seems like your lyrics are a bit rehash of everything i've been hearing. You say you are a deviation from dashboard, but I bet I could name a hundred lines from his songs just like yours. Try different structures, different... just something. Once again, don't take this the wrong way, it's just constructive criticism.
I don't mind constructive criticism. I never said I was a dashboard deviation, although I will say I think I don't sound like him other than the fact that we both have acoustic guitars. As far as the lines that are just like mine, I can't really think of any off the top of my head, but I'd like to hear these lines... just because I've never really noticed or been told this before so I'd like to know some of the lines. As far as trying different structures, I try to. This song is actually quite different from all my others. There's not real verse or chorus I don't guess. The first part could be called the verse, then the second part the pre-chorus and the next part would be the chorus. Then the last part would be this really long outro. Its kind of hard to say anything about structure when you haven't heard the song. Anyway, you're welcome to respond here or email me casey@foreverdown.com or catch me on AIM, but I'd really like to get more on this critcism you gave, because I don't quite understand it. Thanks so much to you
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i really love the lyrics casey. its a way i feel sometimes too and its got some creative lines like "you should probably get it in writing. does this count?" anyway im excited about where your going and how the new stuff is coming along. Jon
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cant wait to hear it recorded
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