in your favorite sweater, with an old love letter, i wish you would...come pick me up

Oct 31, 2005 19:45

as much as creative writing annoys me sometimes, i kinda like that it forces me to write more poems ( Read more... )

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needsajob13 November 1 2005, 01:04:45 UTC
I really like the second one

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foreverpink November 1 2005, 12:14:10 UTC
thank ya
i like you

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since i always follow directions needsajob13 November 2 2005, 23:48:47 UTC
She stands in the doorway, wet as can be.
She struts on my rug with her mud streaked sneakers.
I notice my favorite shirt on her
Light aqua, mom tells me it matches my eyes.
I remember three paychecks in our hands
And the red sale tag screaming 17.99.
I bought the shirt for autumn time
Not too heavy, not too light.
I already had two bags in my hand
She carried only one.
Now I look at her, and the shirt
I’d find excuses to wear everywhere.
She gives me a smirk as if who cares
I glare til she mutters sorry half heartily
She then stalks out, you said we’d share
The shirt anyway, always
I mumble without thinking before
We can’t share cloths forever.
Then reality snaps and the light aqua shirt
That matches both of our eyes
Is in the trash.

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Re: since i always follow directions foreverpink November 3 2005, 18:51:34 UTC
did u change anything?

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Re: since i always follow directions needsajob13 November 4 2005, 02:37:11 UTC
i just cut some words out like you told me
mainly on the top half

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