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foreversin

Changing Tides Prologue Revised Version.

Nov 17, 2008 11:03

Here is the new version of Changing Tides.

( Changing Tides: Prologue )

update, fanfiction, changing tides

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greensan December 29 2010, 22:39:38 UTC

You're a good writer. Too bad I'm not into Naruto anymore D:

foreversin December 29 2010, 22:43:16 UTC

I'm not either which makes it a pain in the ass to finish this story. I don't think the latest one I finished is here though.

Glad to see you like it! I love plot devices and hope the prologue sets up a lot of them!

greensan December 29 2010, 22:45:58 UTC

Iruka has lost his memories and become a ninja of the mist. And can use Water jutsu. That is what I can make out of your prologue, what could you make out of mine?

And you have a nice style, though it would make it a little easier to read if you used 'Enter' some more times and made some of the paragraphs smaller.

foreversin December 29 2010, 22:59:38 UTC

Heh yeah I know spacing can always use some work. For some reason I feel the need to just continue unless I am done with that thought. Since my thoughts can go on a while it gets a tad cluttered lol.

TFS. . . was a interesting one. Flashbacks and time jumps around coupled with feelings of two different types makes for a interesting read to be honest. Nice conflict between the two.

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