THIS STORY IS FREE FROM ALL ERRORS!! I bet YOU can't find any!

[forgivesusan]

PLEASE comment/correct!

Our King sits beneath his crimson banner, beneath the two golden lions of William the Conqueror. Their gilded claws are raised to take on all comers, for he is King Henry the First, and he bears the banner of his father

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[teal_cuttlefish]

I found several little errors and a couple of questions:

Part 1, Paragraph 2, last sentence:

They lived in great happiness, and they a little son and a bonny daughter named Elia Nore.

missing word -- they had a little son, etc

6th paragraph from the bottom of Part 1, 1st sentence:

So also did she find delight in the king’s son, Evit Caje, who was gentle lion by day

...who was a gentle lion...

Part 2, para 3, sentence 2:

The nobles were so accustomed to the incredible tales of their adventuring Queen’s adventures...

Drop one of the "adventure" words. Redundancy is redundant.

Para 5: Lord Peirce,

I'm pretty sure it should be spelled Pierce throughout. One of those spellings is off, anyway.

Part 2:

Then he gave her a silver egg, saying “Never have I met anyone like you - alas! I am too old to go with you on your adventure. But when your heart is breaking, break the egg, and remember me.”

Should that be "break this egg"? This is more of a nit

[von_gelmini]

I liked all your fairy tales. :) did you read them at Faire? I'd've sat and listened with a big smile on my face, the same way I sat here reading them.