Thirteen

[shadowsinfire]

Title: Thirteen
Series: Naruto
Rating: T
Characters: Kakashi, Rin, Obito
Spoilers: Kakashi Gaiden, unspecific current stuff
Warnings: angst.

Notes:  Kinda impromptu, written far too late at night, critique welcome.  Thanks.

Kakashi is thirteen, and he's already lost track of the men he's killed.  Every day means a new enemy, another poor soul dead.

He's an

Comments

[kireiko]

So beautiful, so haunting - very very well written. I love the flow and style of this piece, very fitting. The end really tugged at my heart strings, but in a very good way.

(Only the one typo I noticed, second last paragraph part: ...life is hard but watr is harder... other than that lovely lovely work!!)

^_____^

[shadowsinfire]

Dankeschon~ will fix. I'm glad you liked it.

[malinear]

I was already loving the tone and feel of this...and then you hit me with the last passage. At "Obito is thirteen years dead," I felt like I was slammed down and the wind was knocked out of me, tears coming to my eyes.

Absolutely perfect.

:D

[shadowsinfire]

Thank you - I'm glad you liked it. I'm pleased with the last bit too.

[pinkhead]

You know, I admit to really hating almost all fanfiction, but that was really nice. Great job. :) ♥♥

[shadowsinfire]

Thanks. I'm glad you like it XD

[alesca_munroe]

I am in awe of the sheer brilliance of your writing. Kinda makes a girl want to hide everything she's ever posted. ^_~ More soon, hm?

[shadowsinfire]

Hmm... I'll try... most of the time I write Bleach, though (do you read that?). This is actually my first Naruto fic... I'm doing more though.

I'm glad you liked it :D

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[alesca_munroe]

Hooray for more Naruto~! Yeah, I've read some Bleach before, it's an interesting series. *goes to hunt down the mentioned Bleach writing*