Hmm...this is both sexy and at the same time vaguely creepy! I like the uncertainty there. The fact that Ed came home and suspected his father had done something to Alfons - the reader wonders, is that just Ed's inherent mistrust of the man, or does he have reason to worry? It takes something simple and makes it more complicated, and I like that :)
Love your icon! I've had years like that. Beautiful story. Very well written. The ending was bittersweet (I didn't want Alfons to die!), but done so well! Excellent work!
The end took me entirely by surprise, but it added depth to an already good story. It had already crossed my mind that Hohenheim had tried the same thing on Ed, and Ed telling Alfons that his father swore he didn't do anything to him made me wonder even more.
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Beautiful story. Very well written. The ending was bittersweet (I didn't want Alfons to die!), but done so well! Excellent work!
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