'Teams RWBY and JNPR were all in the library, team JNPR was using the library like they were supposed to. At a nearby table however, team RWBY was playing a board game
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You know, according to TV Tropes, Yang is Team RWBY's only sane man (tough fans often apply this trope to Pyrrha as well.) Despite that they still og along With whatever their freinds do because they don't want to spoil the fun. That is pretty much the oppossite of what Boy is doing.
Huh, I would've thought that Blake or Volume 1!Weiss would be more of the Only Sane Woman type for RWBY. But that is still a good point; they do tend to still have fun and only rein in the others when things go that bit too far.
So AJ is just being a Debbie Downer here. He doesn't fit in with the comedy style of the show in general. Then again, if I had counted from the beginning how many jokes he's ruined, I can only guess that it'd be quite a large number.
Actually, Haven is located in Mistral, what the Schools in Vacuo and Atlas are called is currently unknown.Ah, yeah. And that is something we should have checked. And I even checked it at the time. :''D There is no excuse for that, so thanks, I'll fix that
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'So AJ is just being a Debbie Downer here. He doesn't fit in with the comedy style of the show in general. Then again, if I had counted from the beginning how many jokes he's ruined, I can only guess that it'd be quite a large number.' He also seems to be going for a Team Dad thing (another feature Yang and Pyrrha share) but he just comes of as condencing and belitteling. He doesn't get that the reason Yang and Pyrrha are the "mothers" of their respective teams is because they are nicest and most supportive of everyone.
Weiss has yet to win once. Yeah, because she's never played before. Do you honestly think you could rope her into playing a game she doesn't understand a second time? She'd need to hole up with the instructions for an hour or two before she'd be willing to play again.
"Sorry Jaune, but I'm not sure I trust Vale with you." AJ said jokingly. Stealing Weiss's jokes will not distract me from how much you hate her. It only makes me hate you more.
it gave me enough time to start thinking about Torchwich Y'know, instead this eating away at her for at least a week or two, she'll just suddenly think of it and jump straight to the completely wrought stage. The phrasing also really bothers me. I could get the idea that a new boyfriend might distract her from the whole White Fang deal*. But the fact that she's apparently unable to think about it at all until he's removed from her presence has some really bad connotations to it.
* But that would be change, and change is bad!
"After my fight with Yang. I think I'm ready." AJ said.So, beating
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The scene where they agree to stop the terrorists was much funnier in the original. Yang's little fist bump thing, and the fact she added "I love it when your feisty!" and the fact that Weiss nodded like they were deciding where to go lunch made the scene much better. (And also less time between Ruby asking and the payoff made that joke better.)
This fic sucks the fun from RWBY like a little boredom vampire bat.
[Fufu]: This line comes right the fuck out of nowhere, since I can’t make a connection between Weiss insulting him and AJ telling her to be nice and Jaune saying this. Unless this was also in the show but has a better lead in. God I am legit on edge in these later chapters after it turned out the author was outright altering lines to suit AJ’s story./ this is the canon exchange.... J: (confident, ending smugly):Bring it on, Ice Queen! I'll have you know I've been told I'm a natural born leader W: (sarcastically)By who? Your mother? J: (hurriedly adds)A-And Pyrrha! P: (background, singsong tone) Hello again! (callback to vol. 1) wow he sure ruined a string of jokes with his inclusion. good jorb author.
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Huh, I would've thought that Blake or Volume 1!Weiss would be more of the Only Sane Woman type for RWBY. But that is still a good point; they do tend to still have fun and only rein in the others when things go that bit too far.
So AJ is just being a Debbie Downer here. He doesn't fit in with the comedy style of the show in general. Then again, if I had counted from the beginning how many jokes he's ruined, I can only guess that it'd be quite a large number.
Actually, Haven is located in Mistral, what the Schools in Vacuo and Atlas are called is currently unknown.Ah, yeah. And that is something we should have checked. And I even checked it at the time. :''D There is no excuse for that, so thanks, I'll fix that ( ... )
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But ya, my bad. Sun's from Vacuo, Haven is not.
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He also seems to be going for a Team Dad thing (another feature Yang and Pyrrha share) but he just comes of as condencing and belitteling. He doesn't get that the reason Yang and Pyrrha are the "mothers" of their respective teams is because they are nicest and most supportive of everyone.
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Yeah, because she's never played before. Do you honestly think you could rope her into playing a game she doesn't understand a second time? She'd need to hole up with the instructions for an hour or two before she'd be willing to play again.
"Sorry Jaune, but I'm not sure I trust Vale with you." AJ said jokingly.
Stealing Weiss's jokes will not distract me from how much you hate her. It only makes me hate you more.
it gave me enough time to start thinking about Torchwich
Y'know, instead this eating away at her for at least a week or two, she'll just suddenly think of it and jump straight to the completely wrought stage.
The phrasing also really bothers me. I could get the idea that a new boyfriend might distract her from the whole White Fang deal*. But the fact that she's apparently unable to think about it at all until he's removed from her presence has some really bad connotations to it.
* But that would be change, and change is bad!
"After my fight with Yang. I think I'm ready." AJ said.So, beating ( ... )
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This fic sucks the fun from RWBY like a little boredom vampire bat.
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"Weiss, don't be mean." AJ scolded.
"And Pyrrha!" Jaune added.
[Kirby]: But Pyrrha is never mean.
[Fufu]: This line comes right the fuck out of nowhere, since I can’t make a connection between Weiss insulting him and AJ telling her to be nice and Jaune saying this. Unless this was also in the show but has a better lead in. God I am legit on edge in these later chapters after it turned out the author was outright altering lines to suit AJ’s story./
this is the canon exchange....
J: (confident, ending smugly):Bring it on, Ice Queen! I'll have you know I've been told I'm a natural born leader
W: (sarcastically)By who? Your mother?
J: (hurriedly adds)A-And Pyrrha!
P: (background, singsong tone) Hello again! (callback to vol. 1)
wow he sure ruined a string of jokes with his inclusion. good jorb author.
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