“An Unexpected Visitor”
A short story I wrote as an idea for a college essay. It's not based on a true story. .o.
“Nicole.”
“Huh?” I lifted my eyes from the heavy book I was perusing. A small, tense voice, softer than before, replied, “Come. Over. Here. “
Concerned, my body rolled off the couch and I padded over to the kitchen.
I froze.
The warm light from the ( Read more... )
“Nicole.”
“Huh?” I lifted my eyes from the heavy book I was perusing. A small, tense voice, softer than before, replied, “Come. Over. Here. “
Concerned, my body rolled off the couch and I padded over to the kitchen.
I froze.
The warm light from the ( Read more... )
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Um... you have a lot of simple senteces... I understand that it's to give it emphasis.. I do it too when I write. I don't know. I'm saying that because in my memoir that i turned in on Friday, we had to have a variety of sentences and yeah.. I had a lot of simple... but maybe just enough of the other ones to not get points taken off...
But this is a personal essay or whatever they call it. Ignore me.
Know that it was really good. (o^-')b
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Thankies Tiffers. I kinda make big complicated sentences all the time when I talk or think to myself, so it's always good to have sentence variation (they're always looking for stuff like that). O:
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