Comments | fullmetalsues: See Spot Run. Run Spot Run.

fullmetalsues

See Spot Run. Run Spot Run.

Jan 12, 2006 17:37

This stu-thor cannot be 20 years old. I know nine year olds who write better than this. It's basic grammar, combining your short choppy sentences so they don't sound like a "See Spot Run" crossover ( Read more... )

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psycho_taryin January 13 2006, 02:06:21 UTC

*flails* OHGODSOSTUPID. This is why teeny-bopper fans need to have their fan-ficing licences revoked.

dragontrap January 13 2006, 02:22:22 UTC

*looks at Review*

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*looks at Reviewer*

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How in all mighty HELL did you even find the stomach to actually READ through their fic in its entirety in the first place? After glancing over this, I wanted to gouge my eyes out and wash them in acid... I applaud you however for having the balls to sit through however many chapters of this sludge they call a fic (if this person is indeed 20, then they seriously need either A) Help or B) To stop now before they do some mental damage to someone)

bubblefire January 13 2006, 06:16:55 UTC

i don't know but i can't stop laughing at this story XDDD is soooo crap its funny, it kills XDDDD

shiny_lights January 13 2006, 07:01:28 UTC

He’d stand out in the street and glare at any state alchemist that walked by.

I wish a car would drive by and run into him. :( And the childish grammar makes me want to rip my hair out. >.

evocates January 13 2006, 10:36:37 UTC

This is a classic case of 'laugh at the author, not with the author.

Ahahahahahaha. -ded-

And this? Most dogs don't exactly obey their masters, they just run around them and slobber over their faces. *stares at a State Alchemist* Dude, I can totally see him slobbering over anime!Pride's face.

Priceless. TOTALLY PRICELESS. -ded-