Comments | fullyajar: Fic: Consolation Prize

fullyajar

Fic: Consolation Prize

Feb 27, 2011 01:03

Heather blinks at the computer screen, willing it to change. No freakin’ way. She blinks again, but the screen stays stubbornly the same, the pixels mocking her. Crap, crap, crap.... She swallows deeply and looks up at the empty doorway as she hears approaching footsteps. Naya enters through the door with a smile on her face.

“Dinner is served,” ( Read more... )

heya heather naya e!online

Comments 11

catbast February 27 2011, 01:12:57 UTC

Soo so hot! Great job :D

fullyajar February 27 2011, 09:48:08 UTC

Thanks! :D

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fullyajar February 27 2011, 09:49:46 UTC

I'm glad it made you feel better! That was the aim. I think we all needed some cheering up...

Yay, I got Dianna down. I've only seen a few interviews by her, but she seems like she has a pretty fun sense of humor. :)

Thanks for the review!

patmik February 27 2011, 17:27:39 UTC

OMG, Naya really takes the poll so seriously, just like us, huh? Gotta love our Captain!!

And oh yea... the sex... is so.... hottt!!!!!!!!!!!

fullyajar February 27 2011, 21:38:02 UTC

Of course! She -is- our Captain, after all! ;)

Thanks for the praise! :D

pee_wee_2005 February 27 2011, 23:17:41 UTC

ngl, Naya's srs bsns made me lol.

Heather is an excellent distractor.

fullyajar February 28 2011, 14:29:07 UTC

Hehe, that was the intention! I had a lot of fun writing her as
getting serious and up in arms about losing. :)

Thanks for the review!

sadako_mcfly March 19 2011, 20:26:56 UTC

I have a few things I'd like to point out.

Alright, so, let's start with the messy coming out story and their first time. Now I'm REALLY curious to know how that was. *-* Do you plan on writing it?

Second, Dianna's call. :D That was an ingenious addition!

Third, their stamina. I mean, it's not exagerated. Quite the contrary, most people write them doing it once and that's it. Clearly it isn't. xD It's like a meal; you have the entry and the main dish, dessert... :D You freakin own this style of writing - yes, I'm calling smut a style xD.

And fourth, I'm so sad I didn't get the chance to read your story after this absurdity happened. I would have felt slightly better. Because we all know Naya and Heather were the only ones to get REALLY ok with the aftermath of our lost fight. xD

Once again, you blew my mind.

fullyajar March 21 2011, 23:46:04 UTC

1. Hehe, I didn't plan on writing that, no. That's just how I imagine it; Naya the confident one who doesn't really give a crap, and Heather all worried about it in the beginning. Tinhat superglued on, of course! :P

2. Dianna's interviews crack me up. She -had- to be funny, even in the small appearance she made here. :)

3. Yup, there has to be a buildup, and then the release has to match that. It's just physics, isn't it? :P Thanks for the praise. I -do- actually write other styles as well, but smut is definitely the most fun.

4. Aaw, that's too bad. I posted it on L-chat (though we're not allowed to mention L-chat outside of L-chat) to cheer people up, but everyone was just too depressed. Naya was based largely on my own reaction and the other girls as well, but I doubt anyone had as good a distractor available as Heather, haha!

Once again, thanks a bunch for the reviews! It's great to be flooded with them like this! :)