help!

[fweever]

Version 1

Comments

[zatchmort]

I dunno... the snippet of the UNA that I've read, that was mostly from the girl's point of view (I think?) was great, and I love that concept... on the other hand, Version 3 is such a great blurb. Maybe you could alternate POV? Like an adventure novel, where you have a 3rd-person omniscient narrator, but who sort of focuses on the perspective of one particular character for each section or chapter.

I guess that wasn't too helpful overall, was it? You're kind of back where we started. I guess what I'm trying to say is, you'll have to try it and see for a bit, but I'm sure that whatever you'll write will be great. ^__^

[daviot44]

Who is the primary voice? Even in 3rd person omnicient, one character tends to be followed more than the others. Is it Eddie's story, or the story of one of the group?
Version 3 is a great blurb, but doesn't sound like a back-cover blurb to me.
Version 2 would be better if it's mainly Eddie's story, Version 1 would be better if it's the group's story and doesn't focus on one character, and if it does, that character should be reflected in the summary. (as it is, since it's non-specific, version 1 feels impersonal).

[hrhleia]

I like the last one as being very in-character spout off, but I don't think it works as a back cover blurb. I could see it as the first page or in the first chapter, though. The first one sounds more like a story summary on ffn, but the second one definitely sounds like back covers I've read. Good luck!