Fic: Star Trek: And this line, is your path (and this curve, is your neck)

[fyrethief]

Title: And this line, is your path (and this curve, is your neck)
Characters: Jim/Bones
Rating: PG [a few bad words]
Words: ~1,300

Summary: Jim's standing motionless beside one of the huge, dark windows. He's shed his gold shirt of command, dumped it somewhere, and the black of his undershirt blends with the black seeping in through the viewscreen

Comments

[avictoriangirl]

NNNNNNNGH. Neck licking! And kissing! Unf. I don't care what you say, this feels like neck!porn to me! And I LOVE THIS LINE:

He kisses Jim's neck. 'You've got it the wrong way round,' he says gruffly. 'I do the following.'

I always love the way that you write banter, and the end was sweet and perfect. :D See? Your writing mojo has not gone anywhere at all, bb! ♥ ♥ ♥!!!!

[fyrethief]

:D *smooshes you*

Well, I'm glad you think it's neck!porn, but it doesn't feel porny enough to me to be classed as such. It's more like... the precursor to neck!porn.

Your writing mojo has not gone anywhere at all, bb! - D'aw, thank you. Your approval makes me feel more confident. :) (But you have no idea how much else was started and tossed away before I wrote this, and how much I agonised over this, and I still feel not-completely-convinced. For me, it's like the first step in the right direction. But I'm thinking maybe follow-on-scene, with proper neck!porn? Y/y?)

LOVE YOU. ♥ ♥ ♥

Also also -- banter! Yay! Thank you! Because, arrggh, why does writing Bones cause me so much grief?!

[avictoriangirl]

*smooshes you back* :D A follow-on-scene? You even have to ASK? O_o HELL YES!!!!

I LOVE YOU TOO!!!!!!!! ♥ ♥ ♥ *uses my other neck!porn icon for your inspiration* ;D

[fyrethief]

:D *puts thinking writing cap on*

GUHHHHH. KARL'S NECK. YUM. (AND SUIT. AND STUBBLE. UNF.) Is it just me or is it easier to imagine Jim doing things to Bones' neck, than vice versa?