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Here With You [Jori]

Apr 24, 2011 02:37

Title: Here With You
Rating: G
Author: gabbie217
Pairings: Tori/Jade
Summary: It's Tori's birthday and Jade's marvelous plans are falling apart.
Disclaimer: I regret nothing. I mean I own nothing ;]
Spoiler Alert: None.
Author's Note: This is for a fluff contest. Hope you like it :D

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femslash, victorius, jade/tori, jori

Comments 4

insaneblueberry April 24 2011, 17:05:10 UTC

Wow. I loved this so much. The end was so cute. Did I mention that I loved this?

(this was so much better than my entry btw)

gabbie217 April 24 2011, 22:22:41 UTC

Thank you. I think you might've loved it.... Bahahah.

Your entry was good! Very fluffy :] I think we both did amazing! <3

ninjasaurus_thx April 24 2011, 19:46:06 UTC

This was really sweet and awesome. There aren't any major flaws, save for a few little typos, but here:

"Happy birthday sweetie!" Jade beams. She hands Tori the flowers and gooey chocolate croissants.

Jade seemed a little OOC, also in other places too. So just work on it, but besides that everything's really fine. :)

gabbie217 April 24 2011, 22:21:40 UTC

I could blame it on me only watchin a few of the episodes, but really inwasnt paying attention. Thanks though. I'll be sure to not make her sweet and lovey. Haha.

Glad you liked it!