This Could Be Anywhere

[gaesis]

That's what I've decided to call this for now. This is about three times as long as the last thing I posted and in serious need of editing, but what more do you want from a first draft? :P Here it is, please leave a comment after you've read it. Thanks.

Comments

[megalith]

It was nice to have the opportunity to read some of your story. You obviously have quite a bit of talent. I'm intrigued to see more of the back story for the two of these characters, as well as what their lives are like outside of these scenes

[megalith]

Oh! And "alright" should be "all right." This is another, even more widespread error (and one that I used to make, until it was pointed out to me).

[gaesis]

Thank you so much for your input! You're the first to have commented on my work and I really appreciate the constructive criticism and feedback. It's nice to see what a reader other than me thinks and would like to see in future segments.

This story is very much disjointed at the moment, as it is a work in progress. I tend to jump around a bit when I am writing something and then will put it in order later.

I will make the necessary changes as far as editing goes, and post more later.

[megalith]

Awesome! I'm glad it was helpful. I can't wait to read more.
I remember you saying on a previous occasion that you worked in that way, which intrigued me. Out of curiosity, when did you write the first part in relation to later parts? Is this older or more recent?