Original Fic: Life On Mars, part the second

[gaijin_chan]

I remember how once I got to Junior High, it felt like you had to measure everyone in terms of how cute they were, as in for instance, “he’s too cute to go out with her,” or “he could totally go out with anyone he wants to, he’s so cute.” And half of everybody’s time was taken up with watching boys, and talking about how cute they were - Or weren’

Comments

[twhitesakura]

This is heart-warming and nostalgic! I love that detail you added about Jenny going to the fabric store just because she liked the fabric and not to sew -- really great human quirk. I also like how this is building. I already feel the dynamic between Jenny and David that'll lead to the future you mentioned in the opening of chapter 1.

[gaijin_chan]

Thanks dear, thanks. Glad to know you're following the story :)

[daimeryan_rei]

It's cute and heart-warming indeed dear, it really breathes the '80's with your attention to detail. These people are much more sympathetic and easier to follow than your first story dear, and I can't wait to see which direction you're going to take them in. It's good!

[gaijin_chan]

Thanks dear, thanks. With this one I'm going more slowly with, just an installment a week or so. I want to get the tone right, and deliver something I can actually feel good about.