Jun 30, 2011 23:18
writing,
character: sawada iemitsu,
character: rokudo mukuro,
pairing: hibari/mukuro,
character: nagi/chrome dokuro,
pairing: bl,
genre: general,
character: sawada tsunayoshi,
genre: romance,
character: kusakabe tetsuya,
fandom: khr,
story: in sights,
character: hibari kyoya
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Hibari - 9 ; Fffft! I would have given you a 10 but I don't think Hibari would swear. The "Shit," maybe. But the F-word is a different story. I think Hibari would be against cursing most times as he's part of the Disciplinary Committee (even if it's ten years later).
Mukuro - 9 ; I can totally imagine your Mukuro! The way the Hibari and Mukuro would slowly start to interact more and the way he treated Chrome.
Chrome - 6 ; As Chrome wasn't mentioned much and the story didn't really include anything about Chrome's actions and such compared to Mukuro and Hibari's, I can't determine whether you've got her character down or not.
Grammar/Spelling: 10 ; No mistakes at all. Very well written. Kudos to you!
Story Flow: 20 ; ...This is the first 20 I've ever given for Story Flow. Be proud, dude! D:
Prompt Usage: 11 ; I didn't see much of the prompt, only at the beginning and then some light mentions of it in the body, but it was clear to me what the supposed public embarrassment was.
Originality: 12 ; I didn't expect ( ... )
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