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anglopollyanna August 24 2008, 06:36:02 UTC
It's a good start. I think you've captured their voices very well.

I liked Henry's explanation of why he paints Christina, and then the misdirection where it appears for a moment that he's talking about knowing Dorian Grey, but it's actually Wilde.

I enjoyed the 'carrion' pun, but I love puns :-)

Not sure why the lj-cut tags aren't working. That's definitely the write way to write them, but you can't usually see them. If you posted using the HTML box, try using the Rich Text option, (or vice-versa) and try re-typing the tags.

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gaviotaplateada August 24 2008, 06:46:18 UTC
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it ^^

You know, I sat in front of the computer for like 40 minutes trying to figure out why the lj-cuts didn't work. I WAS using the rich text mode, too, so I don't get it at all. In the end I just gave up... maybe it was a glitch or something.

Anyway thanks for the comment!

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Another thought on lj cut anglopollyanna August 24 2008, 07:00:32 UTC
When you're using Rich Text there's some icons at the top which do different things. There's one in the middle which has some lines and then a little squiggle like a graph. If you click on that it does an automatic lj-cut. You could try practising in a private entry.

Since you used Rich Text, I think if you did go in and edit in HTML mode, you might be able to get the lj-cut to work.

Good luck with LJ and the writing!

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sindee1982 August 24 2008, 17:56:40 UTC
LOL, oh well done! I really like how you captured their personalities, and the dialogue is REALLY entertaining :) I can so picture them acting this scene out, and it makes me miss the show even more *sigh* My favorite passage? "Christina is a vivid memory that I must honor. I paint her every year to remind myself of how I felt about her and place it in sharp contrast of what I feel the moment I paint her. As a result I always see her differently. But I always see myself in the same light, my impressions don’t change.” Wow. That is really insightful and totally accurate in my opinion ;) Great start!

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gaviotaplateada August 25 2008, 01:11:07 UTC
Thank you! I'm very happy you like it ^^
I think Vicki's and Henry's conversations are the best thing of the show, and I tried my hardest to keep them in character. Thanks for the comment!!

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gabzillaz May 25 2009, 19:03:03 UTC
Recien me doy cuenta que sos argentina XD

Es un poco tarde (casi un año tarde), pero queria decirte que me encanta como escribis. :3

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