Part 3

[gdsbutterfly]

it pasted a 6 days

In the morning Chinen woke up looks around and remembered he stayed over night for 6 days then looked

at the digital clock which showed 7:00am on a saturday he went to use the washroom and washed his face

he walked out of the washroom and seen Hotaru still sleeping so he went down stairs to see if anyone is

awake sure enough

Comments

[hikarijournal]

Ehhhh... Yamada killed her...
The story is kind of thriller but the your chapt 1 and 2 is quite not arranged properly...

Try breaking the lines of speech and description so that it will be clearer...

:]

[gdsbutterfly]

thank you for reading :D

i know i made a mistake but i tried to put spaces but it didn't work :(

do you like it? :D

Re: :]

[hikarijournal]

about the spaces... i guess you're using html when posting... try using the the plain text and separate by spaces... you're chapter 3 is fine... it was separated nicely...

Sure i kind of like it... and you have new uploaded fanfiction... the title is the new student and the first day of school?... right?...

I'll read it if i have time...

Re: :]

[gdsbutterfly]

hehe

okay ^^