Comments | geekmama: Drabble: 'Night One' (J/E - PG - 300 words

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Drabble: 'Night One' (J/E - PG - 300 words - Theme: 'Promise')

Apr 14, 2013 20:38

Hoping artaxastra doesn't mind, but I've been rereading her wonderful PotC stories off and on for the last couple of weeks and, as has frequently happened in the past, was inspired to write fic for her fic. This is Jack's pov, set just before Watching Over You, which is set just after that One Day.

( He has always watched over her, from the moment she fell from the cliff into blue water... )

potc fic, jack-elizabeth, drabble

Comments 12

sevanatwonights April 15 2013, 12:45:00 UTC

Gorgeous! Thank you so much for sharing. This is what their relationship is all about, taking care of one another and (despite her previous treachery which weighed heavily on her soul) protecting one another.

geekmama April 15 2013, 13:32:46 UTC

Thank you very much for reading and commenting. Theirs is an interesting relationship, in so many ways.

pearlseed April 15 2013, 13:22:12 UTC

See here miz GMa2It's been a while since I finished a story of yours in tears, but damn damn damn...this one is just such a pretty boat, er ship. Really truly. The language is fabulous--I so very much like love how words tumble together ( ... )

geekmama April 15 2013, 13:40:43 UTC

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a lovely comment before zooming to work (and I'm sending best wishes that you have a very good Monday, too).

He did try so very hard to forget didn't he?

He's a better man than he wants to be, sometimes. And you're right, it makes things complicated for a pirate.

ext_1466174 April 15 2013, 13:40:25 UTC

Jack saved Liz from drowning when she was no more to him than a shouted name.

Jack was left a chained sacrifice the krakken.

Jack, without a moment's hesitation, flew Liz away from the sinking Dutchman.

Jack is more forgiving than he realizes.

geekmama April 15 2013, 13:47:22 UTC

Very true. He likes to believe he's a harder, more unforgiving man than he actually is.

Thank you very much for reading and commenting!

phoenix_9664 April 15 2013, 15:44:16 UTC

Your version caught my imagination as "Watching Over You" did: how I wish THIS had been the finale scene in AWE, for real. You've captured Jack's usual melange of mixed motives and the unique bond between him and Elizabeth. And to have them lying there WITH the bloody heart--well, that's just too ironic and wonderful. Thanks for this--you made my Monday.

geekmama April 15 2013, 18:18:04 UTC

how I wish THIS had been the finale scene in AWE, for real.

Me, too -- though I don't think it would've passed muster at Disney. Thank goodness we can at least fix things with fanfic.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting!

(I am reading your True Confessions right now and will have comments for you, later. So enjoyable!!)

aletheiafelinea April 15 2013, 16:48:53 UTC

a bit disconcerting all this remembering, when he’d been trying to forget for so long
Somehow I really love this line...

Not a word, no smile, and yet still Jack. Aww. ^^

geekmama April 15 2013, 18:20:11 UTC

It's been a long day for Jack. Or a long year, really.

So happy you liked this. Thank you for reading and commenting!!