Happy Birthday, Lisa!

Mar 16, 2008 09:39

My substitute-substitute birthday story for
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logan, birthday, max

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mrsevilpigeon March 17 2008, 02:11:21 UTC
THANK YOU!!!!

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Yay fic! fauxcynic March 22 2008, 04:01:39 UTC
Two great views of Max, but with so many terrific points and ideas in them too! However, my very favorite line of all, just for the sound of it: "the burning bruises on her back felt like triumph..." (and made even better when this was compared to the dull daily pain which she had just escaped.) The different moments of sensation and what they meant ("The powdery snow underneath her feet tingled like a promise of the things to come, every step taking her further away from the icy floor of their dormitories.") were so very palpable. Nice.

I also very much liked the pull that Max feels back toward Logan in the 2d vignette, her curiosity and fascination with his reaction to and concern for her -- a hint of the magic to come!

(nice to get a slice of the birthday-fic cake! thanks!)

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