Fic: The Man Who Had Only Dreams 1/6

[gemnoire]

Title: The Man Who Had Only Dreams part 1
author: Black Gem
pairing: Arthur/Eames
rating: PG-13 this part
disclaimer: I own nothing, I'm just playing with them.
Summary: Eames had never had a relationship that he could measure in years, family excluded of course, until he met Arthur. He suspected Arthur has never had a relationship at all, at least

Comments

[fraubluecher]

Amazing. I love their first meeting especially! Eames should have more confidence in his pick up lines. The conversation with Cobb is fantastic too. Basically Eames is always hilarious. You give Arthur pretty good retorts too. I could read that banter forever.

Let me say one thing - as you are looking for a beta, you're probably not against concrit: "the other man" does you no favors, especially not that often. "The guy", "that man", "Eames", "the cocky bastard" etc etc would work fine. It just screams bad slash fic cliche, and nothing else about this fic is bad in the slightest!

[gemnoire]

Thank you, the banter I have to say is fun to write (and really the foundation of their relationship as far as I'm concerned).

Thanks for the feedback too, it's... yeah, trying to get the descriptors right so that I don't end up trying myself in pronoun knots. But I'd noticed myself doing it and I shall try for my variety (although also not go to the other slash fic cliche of going through the whole thesaurus)

[twilightthief]

Awesome, love everything about it