Round 2, Final Challenge

[miss_daizy]

Below the cut you'll find the Round 2, Final Challenge drabbles and polls. They're up a bit early this round due to scheduling issues for the mods. Happy Reading

Comments

[pili204]

You guys are both absolutely amazing! No matter who wins, you both have produced great drabbles. Thank you for giving us such great work week after week.

[loonynamelass]

Oh my word

[loonynamelass]

Oh, and one more thing for mysterious writer #1:

Thank you for the Somewhere Over the Rainbow reference! (Was that intentional, or ingrained in our society? Either way, loved it!)

[loonynamelass]

Drabble #2 has such beautiful writing. I could really picture the characters through the dialogue:

"'Genius!' 'Mum'll kill us.'"

Or just this marvelous simile:

"No one needed to know that Fred's absence would always feel alien and wrong, like an open, pulsing wound."

The first sentences brought me into a stream of smooth, clever language.

Then, after the flashback, the style, the way you wield your words, makes the reader feel like George's life is streaming past his eyes. What I'm loving is just the water imagery, the rushing river:

"a blur of marathon-length experiments,"

"Years passed in a stream of events that tugged him along in its current. The dreams of his youth had now run their course, leaving all but one fulfilled."

The fluency of your diction matches the life-to-death theme of your piece, because it's fitting for life to flow so naturally.

[lyras]

Beautiful writing, both of you! Good luck. :)

[lectura35]

This competition was a pleasure to read, guys ^-^.

Thanks! :D